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    candel Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Assalamo-Alekam!
    Inpage mein likha tha, lekin picture yahan show nahi ho rahi!

    ashkon say bojhil ankhon mein sapna koi nahi
    in palkon ki shakhon pay parinda koi nahi
    kaise katein gi yeh musaftein manzil ki
    as rah-e khatin mein humsafar koi nahi


    2mzbnes - Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!
    2mzbnes - Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!
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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    walaikum salam

    bhot acha shair hia
    صرف آواز نہیں ، لفظ بھی مقفل ہیں مرے

    سوچ میں ہوں کہ اب تجھ کو پکاروں کیسے

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    ap ka image show he nahi horaha isko kahe or se upload karke laagaye.
    صرف آواز نہیں ، لفظ بھی مقفل ہیں مرے

    سوچ میں ہوں کہ اب تجھ کو پکاروں کیسے

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    very nice.

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Quote Originally Posted by naz View Post
    ap ka image show he nahi horaha isko kahe or se upload karke laagaye.
    ji haan image show nahi ho rahi thi, ise liye mien nay remove ker di hai aur roman mein likh diya hai

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Quote Originally Posted by naz View Post
    walaikum salam

    bhot acha shair hia
    shukriya

    Quote Originally Posted by baqarkashmiri View Post
    very nice.
    shukriya

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Mashallah
    aap kay khayalat main bari jan hay
    mazeed mashq say or pukhtagi aay gi
    kahin kahin wazan ka masla hay
    magar jald hi alfaz ka ulat phair seekh lain gi
    meri nacheez raey main last shair kuch youn hota to ziada behtar hota
    katain gi kis tarah yeh musafatain manzil ki
    keh raah hay khatan or hamsafar koi nahin
    umeed hay aap is choti c tanqeed ka bura nahin mainain gi
    kush rahain or likhti raian

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Assalam-o-Alikum WR WB

    Wah ! Hijab bhot umda ... khushee hui k adbi zok bhi hay aap mai ... aur prime nay jo neshandagi ki hay us ko qabool kary

    FeamnAllah

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    Quote Originally Posted by primitive View Post
    Mashallah
    aap kay khayalat main bari jan hay
    mazeed mashq say or pukhtagi aay gi
    kahin kahin wazan ka masla hay
    magar jald hi alfaz ka ulat phair seekh lain gi
    meri nacheez raey main last shair kuch youn hota to ziada behtar hota
    katain gi kis tarah yeh musafatain manzil ki
    keh raah hay khatan or hamsafar koi nahin
    umeed hay aap is choti c tanqeed ka bura nahin mainain gi
    kush rahain or likhti raian
    Jazak ALLAH Khair.
    Actually, na he meri Urdu pukhta hai aur na he mein nay Urdu study ki hai as a course. Yeh tou bus poetry partey partey he ulta seedha likh leti hoon.
    Sach pochein tou mein ghazal aur nazam kay beech sahi say abhi distinguish bhi nahi ker sakti.
    koshish karoon gi kay sahi say seekh sako!

    Quote Originally Posted by Bheegi-Palkain View Post
    Assalam-o-Alikum WR WB

    Wah ! Hijab bhot umda ... khushee hui k adbi zok bhi hay aap mai ... aur prime nay jo neshandagi ki hay us ko qabool kary

    FeamnAllah
    Walekam-Aslam!
    Jazak ALLAH!

    "Mein tanqeed aur tareef dono qabool karti hoon"
    It's my FIRST priority, by the way!!

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    Default Re: Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

    kaise katein gi yeh musaftein manzil ki
    as rah-e khatin mein humsafar koi nahi


    wow..!!
    ranisrequest - Aik Shair: Musaftein Manzil Ki!

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