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    Default karwan say bichar gai

    Meri pehli ghazal jo kuch arsa pehlay hee likhti thi
    yahan first time pehli sharing k tor par kar likh rahi hon
    umeed hai apni ara'a say zaroor agaah karain gai aur rehnumai farmain gai



    jinhain kaarwan say gharaz na thi, wo hi manzil par pohanch gai
    hamian manzilon ki thi justujoo, ham hee karwan say bichar gai

    jisay panay k khayalon main, mairay raat din guzar gai
    hamain wo hee akaila chor gai, yonhee baikar saray safar gai

    jin pay tha hamain naaz bohat, jin say they ham purkhulos bohat
    jo they hamari hee sochon k mehwar, wahi log ham say bichar gai

    wo lamhay jo they gul bahar k, jo gham-e-wisaal say they bhikar gai
    gham-e-kusaar ki badolat, wahi pair phir say sanwar gai

    na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
    magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai

    meray dil ka tha wo naghma, meray piyar ki thi wo Roshni
    andhaire raat mujay bakhsh kar, najanay kahan wo kho gai


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    bohat khoob.. aap ke khayalat to bohat achay hein.. rythm ki bhi ain mumkin koshish ki gayee.. baqi likhti rahen gi .. to aur bhi samajh aur nikhaar aata jaye ga.. wazn aur arooz ko choriye.. filhaal aap bus likhiye magar eik cheez per tawaju dijiye.. rawani ke saath saath ashaar mein qafiya aur radeef eik hi ho .. mundarja bala ghazal mein radeef to sahi hai. magar qafiya nadarad hai .. magar aap ki pehli koshish ke lehaz se mujhe aap mein eik acha shayer nazar aata hai .. so safar jari rakhiye.. aur share kertay rahiye.. daad qabool kijiye.. Nawazish..

    wafa aur dua ke saath
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    .....JI RAHAY HEIN KAMAL KERTAY HEIN.....

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    Quote Originally Posted by withlove View Post
    bohat khoob.. aap ke khayalat to bohat achay hein.. rythm ki bhi ain mumkin koshish ki gayee.. baqi likhti rahen gi .. to aur bhi samajh aur nikhaar aata jaye ga.. wazn aur arooz ko choriye.. filhaal aap bus likhiye magar eik cheez per tawaju dijiye.. rawani ke saath saath ashaar mein qafiya aur radeef eik hi ho .. mundarja bala ghazal mein radeef to sahi hai. magar qafiya nadarad hai .. magar aap ki pehli koshish ke lehaz se mujhe aap mein eik acha shayer nazar aata hai .. so safar jari rakhiye.. aur share kertay rahiye.. daad qabool kijiye.. Nawazish..

    wafa aur dua ke saath
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    bohat shukria janab
    thek hai InshaAllah aeinda khayal rakhon gi in baton ka
    aur isse tarah tarefain kartay raheiey


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    Default Re: karwan say bichar gai

    na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
    magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


    bht khoob dear
    aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
    main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai
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    Default Re: karwan say bichar gai

    Quote Originally Posted by R0$hNi View Post
    bohat shukria janab
    thek hai InshaAllah aeinda khayal rakhon gi in baton ka
    aur isse tarah tarefain kartay raheiey
    ji zaroor.. aap aisa hi likhi rahen.. to zaroor tareefen keren gey..
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    .....JI RAHAY HEIN KAMAL KERTAY HEIN.....

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    Quote Originally Posted by ur_friend View Post
    na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
    magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


    bht khoob dear
    aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
    main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai
    hum bhi koi shayer nahi .. hum bhi aap ki tarah sirf qaari hi hein..
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    koitaveezho - karwan say bichar gai

    .....JI RAHAY HEIN KAMAL KERTAY HEIN.....

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    Quote Originally Posted by ur_friend View Post
    na tha shairee say koi wasta , na they shairee say ham aashna
    magar gham-yaar ki badolat, iss fun main ham bhi nikhar gai


    bht khoob dear
    aur bht acha laga withlove ney ap ko mashwara diya
    main koi shair tu nahi ho per gazal perna acha lagta hai

    bohat shukria pasand karnay ka


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    Quote Originally Posted by withlove View Post
    hum bhi koi shayer nahi .. hum bhi aap ki tarah sirf qaari hi hein..
    aap qari saheb hain bohat strick hotay hain wo tu


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    Quote Originally Posted by R0$hNi View Post
    aap qari saheb hain bohat strick hotay hain wo tu
    hahaha.. khoob hai ji ..
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    Default Re: karwan say bichar gai

    jin pay tha hamain naaz bohat, jin say they ham purkhulos bohat
    jo they hamari hee sochon k mehwar, wahi log ham say bichar gai

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