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    cute Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.




    Chupai kaise bhala pyar apna duniya se,

    Likha hua mere chahre pe naam hai tera.

    Tera khyaal mere dil main yuon uterta hai

    Ki sahilon pe koi, jaise paanv dhereta hai.

    Chupaon bhala kaise apna pyaar duniya se

    Tere siwa nahin jachta koi nigahon main.

    Jo too kahe to bikher jaaon teri rahon main


    Nazer kanez teri, dil gulaam hai tera

    Likha hua mere chehre pe naam hai tera.

    Hamare pyaaar ki sadiyon se aashnayee hai

    Meri nazer main azal se kayaam hai tera


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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    yee ap ne khud likhi hay ?

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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    Shukriya Janab, Ye meri likhi hui
    nahin. Ye Janab Qateel Shifai jane
    maane mash hoor Shayer ki hai.
    Humne to aapki khidmet mai pesh ki
    hai. Mai poonch sakta hui, aap ke
    savalaat ki vajeh? All the Best.

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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    pehle to u are welcome

    aur maine savalaat nahi,sawal kia tha bas ik. uski wajah thi ke mujhe doubt hay kuch.
    ya to ye qateel shifaai ki nahi hay, ya phir properly post nahi ki gai.

    i may be wrong .
    if u can.please check

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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    poetry bohat achi hay/up
    lakin kuch missing hay......




    Yahi Dastoor-E-ulfat Hai,Nammi Ankhon,
    Mein Le Kar Bhi,

    Sabhi Se Kehna Parta Hai,K Mera Haal,
    Behter Hai...!!


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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    Hello Killer ( Bara darawna Naam hai)
    and ST, aapka sochan vajib hai ki gazal
    kuch missing hai. Maine bhi jeb isko read
    kiya to aisa he laga. Ye Janab Qateel Shifai
    ke hi hai 100%. Ye jo beech main misra diya
    hai" Jo too kahe to bikher jaaon teri rahon main"
    ye kewal misra he hai iska doosra misra ho to
    ek sher ho jaye. Yahan aapko kuch kami lag rahi hai.
    Pehle socha ki is misre ko chor doon per khyaal
    aisa ker ne se Ghazal ki beadbi ho ti hai. I will
    trace it out and intimate u both the ourtcome.
    Till than Bye Bye. Okay Mod. sahiba.

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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    understood .. ghal boht achi hay no doubt. keep sharing.

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    Default Re: Gazal : Chupai kaisa bhala pyaar duniya se.

    پھر یوں ہوا کے درد مجھے راس آ گیا

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