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    December ..mera Aik khauf


    Mujhe December se shadeed nafrat hai...har pal is darr is wehshat mein Guzarta hai ke December ka agla pal konsa naya toofan le kar aye ga..
    darr darr kar guzarne wale December ke in dino ko mein kis tarhaan kat'ti hoon yeh mein hi janti hoon..
    bhale hi bahar barsaat baras rahi hoon yakh basta hawayein chalein ya mousam baraf ho jaye..mere andar tu chingaariyaan jalti hai aag ke alaooo dhara dhar mere wajood ko jala rahe hain... mere andar sannaton ka raaj hai..mujhe december se nafrat hai shadeed nafrat..
    kitne apno ko meine kho diya ,kitne anmol rishte chhatein aur dost december nigal gaya kyun???

    December itna behiss kyun hai..kya kisi ki aahein udaasiyaan Takleef..kuch bhi asar nahiin karta Is per???
    December ki isi junoon khezi ne mujhe andar tak khator bana diya hai mujh per ab koi khushi koi khoobsurat mousam asar nahiin karta..december ka sard mousam bhi mujh per asar nahiin karta..

    ke jin ko december ne halaat ki bhati mein jala dala ho jeete ji maar dala ho woh kya mehsoos karey ge us mousam ko..woh tu sartapa kisi andekhi aag mein jal rahe hain..

    nafrateein mehroomiaan..zaat ka adhoora pan..
    aur kya bacha hai mere pass?

    meri tamaam khushiyaan jin pyaron se wabista thi unhein tu December le gaya..

    koi khushi..
    koi umeed?
    ab kahan baqi bachi hai?
    faqat aik mohabbat ka ehsaas bacha tha..
    jo dil ki basti mein kisi jhonke ki tarhana dakhil hua tha..
    mann ke soney angan mein bas kar..phool ki tarhaan khil utha tha...

    magar woh ehsaas shayad us tak nahiin pohancha ..
    Us ne mujhe koi khushi nahiin di usne meri mohabbat ko be mol samajh kar mujhe humesha ka dukh de diya..
    woh bhi december hi ki tarhaan bereham ur khator nikla..
    mohabbat ki kashkol mein chand sikke na daal saka..????

    Mujhe kabhi kabhi lagta hai..
    December mujhe kabhi raas nahiin aye ga..
    December se judi har baat mujhe..buhut khofzudha kar deti hai..mein har pal se darne lagi hun..mujh per kisi cheez ka asar nahiin hota magar jab jab December ki amad hoti hai
    mera dil sukhe patte ki tarhaan larazne lagta hai..mere andar khof ke anjane se darr khulne lagte hain
    kisi anhoni ke darr se..

    kyun ke mujh mein mazeed ab kuch sehne ki taqat nahiin hai..
    mein bikher chuki hun..mujhe khud ko samtne do December.. Mujhe jeene do...
    Alhamdullilah

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    Default Re: DeCemBeR..MerA Aik Khouf !!

    bohat acha likha hai Mishaal dear
    especially alfaz ka chunayo, kafiyat ko beyan kerne ke liye bohat acha chuna hai.
    waqeye he jo aap ne likha woh mehsoos hua

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hijab View Post
    bohat acha likha hai Mishaal dear
    especially alfaz ka chunayo, kafiyat ko beyan kerne ke liye bohat acha chuna hai.
    waqeye he jo aap ne likha woh mehsoos hua
    thanks guriya..
    meine bas woh bayaan kiya hai jo log apne ird gird mehsoos karte hain..meine yeh koshish ki hai ke har tarhaan ke jazbaat logon ki jo jo kaifiyaat december se related banti hain un ko express karo and i think us mein thori buhut kamiyaab ho hi gayi hun
    Alhamdullilah

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    kitne apno ko meine kho diya ,kitne anmol rishte chhatein aur dost december nigal gaya kyun???

    December itna behiss kyun hai..kya kisi ki aahein udaasiyaan Takleef..kuch bhi asar nahiin karta Is per???


    bas kuch word mujhe lage k inki jagha koi aur word use hota.. wo thore aise lage jaise ke wo fit nahi hote unki jagha dosre word use hone chahye thy,, thora bachkaana words lage.. bura nahi manna may be mai ghlat houn , ye sirf islaah k liy kaha hay aur ye mera personl opinion hay.. overall boht acha laga.. khas ker ending.. aur jo lines quote ki maine..
    keep it up..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Killer View Post


    bas kuch word mujhe lage k inki jagha koi aur word use hota.. wo thore aise lage jaise ke wo fit nahi hote unki jagha dosre word use hone chahye thy,, thora bachkaana words lage.. bura nahi manna may be mai ghlat houn , ye sirf islaah k liy kaha hay aur ye mera personl opinion hay.. overall boht acha laga.. khas ker ending.. aur jo lines quote ki maine..
    keep it up..
    hmm..yeh bas chand sawaal the december se bachkana hi sahi
    nahiin bura nahiin mann rahi..
    aap ke mind mein kia araha hai kaunse words hone chahiye the..kuch apni suggestion dein..

    thanks for liking..
    Alhamdullilah

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    hmmm jeene do...
    صرف آواز نہیں ، لفظ بھی مقفل ہیں مرے

    سوچ میں ہوں کہ اب تجھ کو پکاروں کیسے

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    Quote Originally Posted by naz View Post
    hmmm jeene do...
    thanks for liking..
    Alhamdullilah

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    Mish bhtt khoobsurat likha hai:Rosee:


    Ik Muhabbat ko amar karna tha.....

    to ye socha k ..... ab bichar jaye..!!!!


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    Quote Originally Posted by SanoriTa View Post
    Mish bhtt khoobsurat likha hai:Rosee:
    thankyou..
    Alhamdullilah

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mishaal View Post
    December ki isi junoon khezi ne mujhe andar tak khator bana diya hai mujh per ab koi khushi koi khoobsurat mousam asar nahiin karta..december ka sard mousam bhi mujh per asar nahiin karta..

    ke jin ko december ne halaat ki bhati mein jala dala ho jeete ji maar dala ho woh kya mehsoos karey ge us mousam ko..woh tu sartapa kisi andekhi aag mein jal rahe hain..
    .mere andar khof ke anjane se darr khulne lagte hain
    kisi anhoni ke darr se..


    Quote Originally Posted by Mishaal View Post


    hmm..yeh bas chand sawaal the december se bachkana hi sahi
    nahiin bura nahiin mann rahi..
    aap ke mind mein kia araha hai kaunse words hone chahiye the..kuch apni suggestion dein..

    thanks for liking..

    ur welcome.. "ghalti" kahin nahi hay, bas post ko behtr kr skti thi agr thore pakke urdu ke words use karti..tehreer already achi hy,
    mai ye nhi keh skta k konse words ane chahye kyon ke ye writer ziada behter way me soch skta hay aur fit bhi kar skta hay, jaha mujhe laga k tmhe inki jagh dosre words use karne chahye thy,wo maine red se highlight kiy hain..ik bar dekh lena thek lage to again sorry, her post me earth worm nikal deta hon

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